The feedback we will act on
Afsarah, Areeba, and Zayna told us a few things we should work on. They told us to make the scene more consistent in sound as they found it infuriating that the volume kept changing. We acted upon this by deleting the first clip we repeat in the first draft. We are also going to delete and replace some clips where it's really quiet.
Afsarah also told us that I should be more enthusiastic and give more emotion in my voice acting, so we will redo those parts. E.g. when Avery fears Jaden chasing her, I am supposed to be threatened and scared.
We will also try to make it seem less scripted to make it more realistic. And we will try to make the plot clearer to understand the audience. As even though the scenes are in order it is a little confusing. And then in the final edit, we will take out all the bloopers and replace the dialogues that we need to in order to finish Dark Secrets.
The feedback we will not act on
Afsarah told us to re-record our lines in a soundproof room, but not only do we not have the time for that but also, we do not have a soundproof room in school.
Afsarah also told us to change Avery's character to seem more interesting by giving her more background story. However, we cannot act on this feedback as we must make our radio drama no more or less than 5 minutes and 30 seconds.
Afsarah said again that the radio drama sounds fuzzy. But I kept the edit that way to make it seem like she is really at home. To make it more realistic.
Zayna told us that we should make the advert a little shorter as it was getting boring without any music. We will be adding music, but we will not be able to shorten the radio drama as again our radio drama can be no more or less than 5 minutes and 30 seconds.